Project # 14
5446 Bartlett Ave,
San Gabriel, CA - 91776
Tel : (626) 278 XXXX
Fax : (626) 278 XXXX
Email : project#14@gmail.com
Octorber 20, 2008
Johnson Ted
Sales Manager
7503 Whitmore Ave,
Rose Mead, CA - 91770
Dear Mr. Ted
In reply to your advertisement in the Wonderful Time for buying a CNC Machine. I am writing to inquire about your order for a CNC machinne.
Would you please stop by and looking the machine. Please give us a call, we will make an appointment with the best operator for seting up and runing the machine.
If you have any questions about the policy, please us me any time.
Sincerely,
Mimi Huynh
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Hi everybody,
ReplyDeleteI mean " please call me any time " in the last sentence.
English writing isn't easy, even more difficult a business letter. I think that your paragraph isn't clear. You should pay more attention with your spelling. Verbs like set and run, you must add a consonant.. setting and running. Machine doesn't have two n's. It's wrong when you say stop by and looking the machine, should be look at the machine.
ReplyDeleteIn your last sentence, maybe you should use a plural for policy.
Hi Pirata333,
ReplyDeleteThank you for your comment. Sometime I made mistakes but I didn't regconize.Thank you for you help.
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ReplyDeleteThis letter does not have enough detail to understand, but I think that maybe only my opinion because I am used to writing business leter.
COHESIVENESS
If you put more detail, it will be good I think.
"Wonderful Time" →Even though I tried to under stand it, I could not understand why W and T were used as a capital letter. If you have time, please teach me. Maybe I was wrong..... I am not sure.
GRAMMAR AND VOCABULARY
seting→setting
runing→running
These gramar were already corrected other reader.
Hi Pinkberry778,
ReplyDeleteThank you for your comment. The Wonderful Time is a newspaper name. That why I had to use the capital letter. Do you think so?